Neurosis Posted August 14, 2005 Share Posted August 14, 2005 http://www.nprime.net/cgi-bin/forum/ultimatebb.cgi?ubb=get_topic;f=14;t=000387;p=0&r=nfx A solo piece of fiction intended to introduce my character, his concept and his environment. Feedback/constructive criticism is of course appreciated. I'm new to Aberrant and the forums, so if I get something wrong, don't be afraid to point it out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
z-Carver Posted August 14, 2005 Share Posted August 14, 2005 You did a good job - if I saw any problems, I don't remember them now. My only suggestion is to break it out into several posts instead of one huge one. It can make it easier to read.But other than that, it was excellent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Long Posted August 15, 2005 Share Posted August 15, 2005 That was a a good read I look forward to the next one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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