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Again I would like to give props to Meridian.

I have really enjoyed your stories. You have managed to bring several elements into Agendas and Conflict. I think you have done a great job with each chapter that when I have read it I feel a connection with each character. When I have finished I feel as though they have really done something but you also manage to leave it a great Cliffhanger point that makes me sit and wait for the next to be written.

Again ...Great Job!

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that is a common mistake.Nott all cancers are the same.Yhere are cancers that can be cure,and other that can't, so I think that in Aberrant world they just cured the common cancers,and most of the rest.

As it is there is a threory that if if you could set some type of cancers at a set rate youc oudl make someone who would live for ever.SO not only are they cured in diffrent ways they also do diffrent things.

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Cancer?

You mean little Mayumi's Leukemia? It was a different type of case. I didn't describe it in detail, didn't think I really needed it to be. Yeah, I know novas have cured diseases and such, but I thought having some old disease pop up in a new form would be interesting. But, since there was good news, I'd bet a cure will be found for her type shortly by some brainy nova.

I didn't know an outside thing like that would distract from the rest of the fiction.

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Sakurako Hino:
Cancer?...I'd bet a cure will be found for her type shortly by some brainy nova.
Actually, it depends. There are all sorts of diseases and genetic disorders that only affect a very small number of people. Bluntly, it might not be worth their time.

Thus Cancer X, which affects millions of people, is cured. But Cancer Z, which affects only hundreds, is not.
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:P You seem to have explained it better than I could have ever tried. Thankies! ^.^ My only other problem with this fic is that I thought it was just... un-nova like. I mean... Too... Mundane. >.< Perhaps if I feel like getting back into things here, I might liven things up a bit.
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I currently have 2 stories active, I ask for patience as I'm sorting through a heavy palette of things in life. I can get rhough in the very near short term. I wish to ask Ronin to wait untill I post to continue on our Fiction thread. I'll be posting the continuation of BOTH stories by this weekend I hope. I'm taking my time so I don't push to burn-out on anything. I'm just being careful.

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Originally posted by Sakurako 'Endeavor' Hino:
Okay, did my part for god and country, and nicely boxed up and wrapped one story. Thanks for riding along, Walker.
No worries, excuse me while I just go back to beating my head with this large stone to try and dislodge the writer/roleplayers block. Everything I try and do lately just ends up sounding lame, pointless, repetative. In a remarkable display of self restraint I have been refraining from drivelling.

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